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=Issue 1 - Soul= =PSA: What Alex Zhang needs to complete this article:=

All Completed, PACKAGED, Spreads in folders, either on server, or on wikispace
^ I did it myself. Seriously people need to get me the above stuff. -Alex.
 * Disclaimer: I didn't do this. - Lenz**

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= Articles Ready for Layout = DONE. = Claimed Articles (Check Layout Page) = Lenz, super job, as always. Your writing is succinct and worthy of Rolling Stone!:) Suggestions noted in the text include pruning of adverbs, look closely at the usage of sophomore/sophomoric and see if that's what you really mean, and look at possessives (apostrophe with names ending in S) Love it! Ms. E **Done and done. Thank you. - Lenz**

**by Kevin Zhu and Daniel Lok. Article title is A Gamer's Soul. - Lenz**

// - Article Name:// "Never Having to Choose for the Soul" I made the corresponding changes. Thanks Lenz! - Grace

I think this is GREAT! What do you think Lenz? //"You really think so? Aww thanks! Is it possible to include photos of the artists i mentioned...? :)" - Micky// **I made some minor edits for dramatic effect, as I thought the writing style just needed that bit more "oomph" in some parts. Otherwise, I think that this article is fantastic. I'm not so sure on the pictures, however, as I think it will be a bit of a squeeze.** //"Ok I think it's ready for layout. I've picked out a couple more mistakes and hopefully eliminated all potential embarrassment inducing factors. Hopefully people will love it! :D" - Micky//


 * [[file:Gwen Pak - Where’s My Soul.doc]] - I was getting vibes from that Mulan song while reading this for some odd reason. Diatribes aside, nicely done. - Lenz**


 * Angella and Kelly**

-I took your editing into consideration and made the following changes :D **Much better. Well done.**

- **Don't think this needs edits. Very concise and accessible, and gets its point across. Well done. - Lenz** - **This is really intense (in a good way). What really creeped me out (and impressed) was all the aggression that seemed to pour out of every word. I think that's why it was pretty good. Well done. - Lenz** I added the disclaimer, so there should be no more issues of possible plagiarism. If there still seems to be a problem, I'll think of something else. - Victoria


 * Angela Angela**

=** Articles that are FINISHED (finished means layout finished, packaged and ON THE SERVER!) **= - (Cover Design) Hmm. I'm not sure how to put this in as a file rather than an image. I hope that you will be able to extract the file from here somehow.. by Max Wang and Connie Wang

- "Soul" (See above for concern)... by Max Wang and Connie Wang

- Irrepressible/Time May Smother Me (poems) by Daniel Lok - I wrote two for fun, you guys can decide which is more appropriate for the theme and what have you. (soz didn't read guidelines) **Well it's a pretty abstract, loose theme we chose for this issue, so I think some leeway can**
 * be given to some not as obvious submissions. Namely, this one. I actually felt that the first one (Irrepressible, I think?) was more suitable for this particular theme, but I think there's room for Time May Smother Me in another issue. Good stuff, Daniel. - Lenz**

I've edited my book review. - Junee

This looks good -- do we need pics of Donna? Ms. E **- No real edits necessary here. We need a picture of Mr. Smith though, so I reckon we're going to have to make someone do that.**


 * [[file:Soul_Regan, Marisa, Anna [edited].docx]] - This is a very well written and thought out piece. Have a look through it one more time to make sure it's complete before we assign it to layout.** Thanks for the edits, i made the changes you suggested (:

Frank's sister

**- Made some more changes I felt were necessary. Should be ready for layout now. - Lenz**

- **Very nicely done. Don't think I need to make any changes here. (Then again, it's poetry. Any edits would be blapshemy.) - Lenz**

**- This probably took waaaaay too long to do. And even then, it still doesn't feel completely right. - Lenz**


 * Rewrite everything in past tense. The present tense narrative as it is just doesn't cut it for me. Otherwise, it's fine. - Lenz** I tried rewriting the entire piece in past tense, but the result made me very uncomfortable, so I left the italicized sections in past and changed the normal timeline to third person present. I also made a number of other major changes that I hope you will find agreeable. :) - Maggie **To be quite frank, I can't help but disagree with what you say about what is being said being more important than how it is said. The thing is, if you use a more precise word to convey the sheer emotion in WHAT is being is said, each and every line of dialogue just becomes that more impacting. Fair enough if you still disagree, as it's your story and not mine, but I just have to put my two cents in. The re-written 3rd person perspective does work better though I have to say.** I definitely do think //how// something is said can be important, but in the case of that particular line, I wanted to emphasize //what// is being said. Were there additional edits you wanted me to make, by the way? - Maggie **No. If you feel that if that's alright then move it to awaiting layout.**

-I finished it. Conclusion might still be a bit iffy but it's a bit better than before. - Alvin


 * [[file:Soul of a Neighborhood- Little Plant- Tiffany Wong.doc]]-Alright Ms.Edmunds. This sounds good to me. I guess labeling the paragraphs will be clearer to the reader. It's fine with me :D ~ Tiffany Wong**

**- Some pretty nice descriptors in this. I think it's fine as it is. - Lenz**

- **You somehow managed to write two pages about chicken soup. Impressive. I'd go through the edited version one more time to make sure everything is accurate if I was you. Otherwise, I don't think I need to make any real changes. - Lenz**