11-12+Issue+3

=Issue 3 - PASSION.= =Writer's Deadline: THURSDAY, FEBRUARY 16 =

**Editor's Notes**
** Note to Authors :** Please **submit** your article to the **"Awaiting Editor Revision"** section with this format: (uploaded document) Title of Article (type of article) by Author of Article An example is:

[[file:movie_review2 (edited).docx]]The Imaginarium of Doctor Parnassus (movie review) by Grace Ko
To eliminate future confusion, please **name your document with this format**: articletitle_authorname = = Thank you for following these guidelines! It makes it a lot easier for us to organize! :)
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 * After revising your article**, upload it again to the **"Articles Ready for Layout"** section with the following document name: articletitle_authorname_final

=** Article Assignments **=

Teacher feature - Roy **Layout: Sam** Protesting - Sofia **(layout Δaniel)** Food - Chiwei Creative Writing - Julia, Amanda, Bryan, Emily, Joy, Vrishti**(Layout Keli)**, Sydney**(layout Keli)**, Angela Wang, Harriet Ryu Eco stuff - Edwin **(layout Kevin Ma)** Crossword - RAMAKRISHNA Editorial - Gwen TEBOW - Edward Cartoon - John + Joyce Collage - Allison & Jennifer **(layout Δaniel)** Music- Claire **(layout Sam)** Movie review - Shane **(layout Keli)** Student spotlight - Ryan **(layout Δaniel)**

=** Submitted Articles **= Movie Review: Act of Valor by Shane Oh

Creative Writing by Harriet Ryu : Passionate Obsession (subtitle : shape of my heart)

= Awaiting Editor Revision =

so here'smy top10 cheesy love songs...+ the pics teeheee (hope y'all like it?) - Micky

**Awaiting Author Revision** Giulia, this has a very intense feeling, and in that sense, expresses passion. It does need to be shaped more so that it has a beginning, a middle and an end, as well as a title and a by-line. Please work on this and re-submit. Ms. E

Changes mostly deal with aesthetics of the article; in general it feels a little light on content though. David **layout: Δaniel SORRY, THERE JUST ISN'T ENOUGH HERE FOR PUBLICATION. PLEASE FIND OUT MORE ABOUT WHAT MAKES HIM TICK, AND SUBMIT FOR ISSUE 4. THANKS! MS. E** - A few areas where I found the writing confusing, see the comments. David -Very minor revisions. David

Mrs. Parham's Passion Article -Moved to word because I don't know if textedit has track changes.David **Layout:**

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Allison, excellent writing -- could you add a preface that introduces what your piece is, and why it should be relevant to SAS students with respect to passion? Also, please upload pictures separately from the article so that layout can work with it. Thanks! Ms. E=====

SORRY ALLISON, THIS NEEDED TO BE REVISED BEFORE WE PUT IT IN THE ISSUE.
Computer Modding - Alvin Wang; I feel like this article would benefit with a slight shift in emphasis towards images. Text is obviously still important, but I imagine this article would work like half a page of text, half a page of images, or even one page of text and one whole page of images, if possible.

Yes, Alvin -- the writing is very good, but it needs images -- please upload whatever images that you think are relevant ones, that show a "before and after" of a modded computer. I'm not sure Sam will have time to go to this website to pick out images. Ms. E **Layout Taken: Sam Sterling**-

= Articles Ready for Layout = (Revised version) - The only edit I made was capitalizing one thing. Effective use of progression in the forms of protest. David **layout: Δaniel David and Sofia, in looking at this article, I'm afraid Dr. Borden will tell us to cut the references to Tibet, because of possible offense taken by the Chinese government. Think about your response to Dr. Borden if that happens. Let's leave it in, and see.** - I shortened and organized it more, and stuff. Syd Ney, Loved the images and the rhythm in this poem. Layout, wouldn't this be great as the back side of this issue? Ms.E **thank you, i sent in a layout form but there are no really specific requirements. I edited it briefly. the title is** Well-done, Joy! Please indicate w ho Zoe is -- what relationship is she to you or to SAS kids? Try to thread this info throughout the piece. If this is a real person, could you upload her picture separately next to your article? I made final edits to the article and made her related to SAS :) DONE - All our images are below here and they're all title with the name of the person. There's
 * [[file:Passion Fruit Butter.docx]]-Chi Wei Zhang,** Fine as is. David
 * passion |ˈpa sh ən|. ****-sydney**

just one layout form for us two, (Jennifer Guan andAllison Fu). - Sean Swarner - Hee Ah Lee - Bobby MartinW. Mitchell

- I followed most of your advice to make the plot and scene changes clearer. I also added a bit more to the ending so it doesn't seem too sudden.

Vrishti: Took some of Ms. E's suggestions. Please have a look.

Ryan P. Edwin Zen.

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